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    The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    Prologue - In the nation of Panem, the ruins of what was once called "North America", just to keep everything "safe", the Capitol says, they host the annual Hunger Games. You've heard Katness's side of the story. Now it's time for Peeta to tell the world what happened.

    Chapter 1 - Outside that Certain Window

    Every afternoon, I would sit on my bed, looking out that certain window that faced the woods. The woods where no one was allowed. I would always see this girl. I thought her name was... Satis or some sort. I would hear that boy call out her name. I knew his name, believe me. He was Gale, her boyfriend. Or, at the time I supposed that was her boyfriend. They were always... so close to each other, that you would think right that second, they were a couple. They would always go hunting in those woods, setting traps, that girl with that name I don't know of yet bring a bow and arrow out there.

    Now I remember what I was trying to say. The night of the fire. That night, something has caught on fire, and a lot of buildings in District 12 were caught in the fire. My father was barking out orders.


    "Take all of the bread you can out, we need it to survive!", he yelled.
    "Father, what about the oth-..."
    "Don't worry, I got it! Just go, Peeta! Take the bread away from here!"

    I grab all the bread I can and hurry out side of the burning bakery. I was heading towards the road that leads to the District Gate. But I was distracted. I was distracted by that girl. She was in the middle of the street, looking horribly sick, and hungry. So, I tossed her a pieces of bread. The edges were scorched off a bit, but I don't think her and her family minded.

    Chapter 2 - The Reaping - Coming Soon

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    Re: The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    Well I like the description, it feels like I was actually there. Overall good job and I can't wait for chapter 2



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    Re: The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    Chapter 2 coming tomorrow!

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    Re: The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    I really liked it but it needs to be longer... you know with more detial. For example: Stopped to smell the roses. Here are some edits in bold. I like how you added about how the district lit on fire

    Quote Originally Posted by Sir Lulz View Post
    Prologue - In the nation of Panem, the ruins of what was once called "North America", just to keep everything "safe", the Capitol says, they host the annual Hunger Games. You've heard Katness's side of the story. Now it's time for Peeta to tell the world what happened.

    Chapter 1 - Outside that Certain Window

    Every afternoon, I would sit on my bed, looking out that certain window that faced the woods. The woods where no one was allowed. I would always see this girl. She was a very special girl. I had always liked her since the first time I saw her. I thought her name was... Satis or some sort. I would hear that boy call out her name. I knew his name, believe me. He was Gale, her boyfriend. Or, at the time I supposed that was her boyfriend. They were always... so close to each other, that you would think right that second, they were a couple. They would always go hunting in those woods, setting traps, that beautiful girl with that name I don't know of yet would bring a bow and arrow out there.

    Now I remember what I was trying to say. The night of the fire. That night, something has caught on fire, and a lot of buildings in District 12 were caught in the fire. My father was barking out orders.


    "Take all of the bread you can out, we need it to survive!", he yelled.
    "Father, what about the oth-..."
    "Don't worry, I got it! Just go, Peeta! Take the bread away from here!"

    I grab all the bread I can and hurry out side of the burning bakery. I was heading towards the road that leads to the District Gate. But I was distracted. I was distracted by that girl. She was in the middle of the street, looking horribly sick, and hungry. I had purposely burnt a loaf of bread. I had always had a secret crush on her. I knew that it would come with risks. My mother hit my face as punishment for what I had done. Instead of giving it to the pigs, I tossed it out to her. The loaf was very burnt but I don't think she and her family minded.

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    Good luck with the rest of your story I can't wait to read more
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    Wow, love the twist to it!
    Almost feels like I'm reading the actual Peeta version of the Hunger Games!



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    Chapter 2 - The Reaping

    The time has come. It was Reaping Day. My dad and I were all spiffed up, ready for this big day. We were up early. I looked out my window. She wasn't there. I'm guessing she is getting ready. That boy, Gale, wasn't there either. I was glad. I don't like him. For some reason, he looks snobby.
    "Come on boy! We're leaving!" My dad yelled from the front door.
    "Coming dad!" I said, as I looked out the window once more. Anyways.. it was time for The Reaping.

    I got there, and looked all around. She wasn't there. Looked again, she was coming down the road behind me. Prim, her mother, and Katness were strolling down the road. I got a little worried, my knees started shaking, so did my hands. I poked my dad and pulled him to the center of the Reaping crowd. They were getting started!

    "Hello everyone! Welcome to the Annual Reaping Ceremony! Let's go over the rules! One boy and One girl will be drawn from these glass bowls! The two that are chosen will be in the Annual hunger Games!" The announcer said, and the crowd went wild!

    "Ladies First!" She yelled into the microphone loudly, and walked over to the girl's bowl.
    She drew, opened the slip of paper, and walked over to the microphone and yelled "Prim Everdeen!"

    Right that second, I noticed that was Katness's little sister! Prim started walking slowly to the stage. Before she stepped on the stage, Katness went over to her little sister.

    "WAIT!" Katness yelled. "I want to volunteer!" Prim replied "You don't have to, I will do it" Katness yelled over to Gale. "Come get her!"

    "No! No! Let go of me!" Prim was yelling. Katness walked up on the stage and said "I would like to volunteer"
    The crowd roared with excitement!
    "Our first volunteer in years! Thank you!" The announcer said!

    "Next, Boys!" she said, and walked over to the bowl, drew a name, opened the slip, and walked over to the microphone!

    "Peeta Mellark!"

    Oh no...

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    Re: The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    it's good........ but.


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    Re: The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    Ok... Did you even read the book?
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    Re: The Hunger Games: Peeta's Side of the Story

    Quote Originally Posted by Yarr View Post
    Ok... Did you even read the book?
    ... well, yeah. In fact, you could say I read the first 2 chapters twice. but I have nothing more to say, carry on.


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